2019-10-14

Testing the Water — Dimmericks

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by Tim Widowfield

Longtime readers of Vridar may recall my “Bad Five-Line Poems.” As you know, a true limerick is not simply a poem that follows the form AABBA; it must also be dirty. Since a “clean limerick” is an oxymoron, we must call them something else.

I’ve been writing politically charged bad five-line poems on Facebook for a few years now, using the term “#Dimmerick.” (My wife often calls me “Dim,” and not without reason. Several old friends from my enlisted days still sometimes call me Dimmy or Dimmer.)

At any rate, for various reasons, I now believe that Facebook is a terrible place to post original content. I’m going to try them out here. And if I can find the inspiration, I’ll try to make them a regular feature.

Our paychecks keep getting slimmer.
Our prospects markedly dimmer.
‘Cause the system’s corrupt.
All wealth trickles up.
And a rising tide drowns all swimmers.
#Dimmerick.

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3 Comments

  • Tom
    2019-10-14 18:51:37 GMT+0000 - 18:51 | Permalink

    Funny you should post this now, because I am in the middle of a 30 day Limerick challenge (one per day) with a friend.

    The other key to Limericks–not just the AABBA rhyme–is anapestic meter (an a PEST/ li mer ICK).

    Lines should also match in stressed and unstressed syllables. The ones in parenthesis are optional, but the lines should match.
    A: (da) da DA da da DA da da DA (da) (da)
    B: (da) da DA da da DA (da)

    example:
    da DA da da DA da da DA
    da DA da da DA

    Des PITE com plete LACK of a SOUL
    and NOT near as MUCH self- con TROL
    i DO what i CAN
    to BE come the MAN
    i CAN if i DON’T pi geon HOLE

  • 2019-10-14 20:50:31 GMT+0000 - 20:50 | Permalink

    Heh Tim

    I love writing poetic limericks as well..I like this one you wrote..just a note to make it flow better..I think you meant to say “wealth” instead of “weath”.

    • Tim Widowfield
      2019-10-15 14:21:25 GMT+0000 - 14:21 | Permalink

      Thanks!

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